KayentaMoenkopi
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I have really had to look hard to find something to complain about. >.< So…uhm.
Evoth: reply #10 ~ It only took two posts to set up for Kirin and I think that it might take longer to perform this seeding on the heavens from the Goryuka no Jutsu... It took Saki 4 posts to create the right conditions for Santon: Shikyo no Kouu. If you were simply amplifying the pre-existing storm, some mention should have been made.
Saki: reply #11 ~ Here you use a Kawarimi between yourself and a kunai…not between yourself and a Dokuton Bunshin. So…there really should have been no ‘body’ for the Kirin to hit, drop to its knees and melt away into a purplish liquid. The Kirin should have hit the Kunai you used the replacement jutsu with.
This was an enjoyable match for me to read. The both of you demonstrated familiarity with your jutsus, placed limitation on their effectiveness based upon the actions of your opponent and used descriptive language to enable the reader to visualize the battle scene. Saki did a good job of cornering her opponent and it only took 7 posts to do it.
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